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  Better? It works, but how's the flavor? Balance?

 

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Hi guys, i would like to get some feedback on my first card i ever created

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Hi guys, i would like to get some feedback on my first card i ever created

Hopefully you like it

 To follow convention with Bolf Ramshield, your card text should say "Whenever your Murlocs take damage, this minion takes it instead." It was pretty close already; just needs a touch-up. Other than that, the name implies he's a Legendary versus an Epic, and "murlocshielder" should be capitalized (although honestly I'd come up with something more fancy). Lastly, the flavor, name and effect all heavily imply he's a Warrior card, as it doesn't really mesh with Warlock.

The "core" of your card is there, and it's a solid enough idea. It could just use a once-over of quality control. But don't let me discourage you: we embrace all first-timers here :)

  Thank you very much for your feedback, 

I was indeed inspired by Bolf Ramshield, i also did not have an idea how to call him as you could see from the bad name. But i have a question: why should it be a warrior?is it because there is the word 'shield' in the name? What should the effect be to make it a warlock-flavoured card? That are actually 3 questions but whatever. Should i change the text or leave it and take the notes for other cards i will create?

 

But for the sec time, im am pleased that someone took the time to advise me :))

1. The Murloc in the art is wearing Crusader gear from Diablo III.
2. The name implies a knight/warrior/guardian/etc.
3. The effect is defensive in nature, but not in a manner consistent with the Warlock's tools (namely Lifesteal and threat-removal).

All of these add up, and create a disconnect between the class you've put the card in and where, I'd argue, it would make the most sense. Your Murloc would be more at home as a Warrior card, in my opinion, as none of the individual pieces say "I'm a Warlock card".

As for names, "Murloc Crusader" is the first thing that comes to my mind, if you want to keep it an Epic. If you upgrade it to a Legendary, you can give it any proper name you'd like, I guess. I'm not familiar with any Murloc warriors you could borrow their name from, but you could always come up with one on your own. I sometimes sit here for several minutes, shopping various names until something clicks.

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I cant upload my adapted version right? Because i already posted this card, or is it different?

 

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Okay thanks alot, i will do my best to not upload it as an attachment

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 Seems like a fine enough card, although the Lifesteal feels out of place. Unless we're joking that tax collectors leech away at our souls lel

If you want Payday to go off automatically, you'll need to word it as such by adding "Cast this when drawn" at the end, like with Scroll of Wonder or Darkness Candle. I'm assuming you do, but I could be wrong. In its current form, it's just a regular spell that your opponent can use when they want. "Here's a free one-time use of the Warlock's Hero Power" doesn't seem very evil, and we all know tax collectors are evil-aligned :^)

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